Comic 188 - Skanks - Page 2

17th May 2010, 3:59 AM
Skanks - Page 2
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fingerwitch 17th May 2010, 3:59 AM edit delete
fingerwitch
Anyways, I'm uploading for the first time since the site got redone and I must say I really like it so far.

Now, here are two things which always bother me in other peoples writing.
1 - When two people are talking and use each others names. When I'm talking to somebody I very rarely use their names unless I'm trying to get their attention. Because I know their name, they know their name, they know who I'm talking to, I don't need to use it.
2 - When a character states a fact that both characters know. Ex: "we've been friends for ten years". Again, she knows this, he knows this, she knows he knows this, and knows he knows she knows it, why would she bother saying it?

This type of writing is really only a cheap shortcut to get something across to the audience, in this case, a somewhat irrelevant piece of information and the character's name, which you already know.

And the really sad part is that I could have been fixing up future scripts instead of wasting time pointing out the failings of this one.

Oh well.

Comments:

Shaman 17th May 2010, 6:09 AM edit delete reply
Shaman
Couldn't agree with you more ;)
Effigy_Power 17th May 2010, 7:20 AM edit delete reply
Effigy_Power
On the other hand, when you script a comic, you do not write a conversation between two people, you write a piece of dialogue for an audience. The audience doesn't have the same information the characters have and as such need things like that.
You might have a conversation with a friend like:
"Remember that girl, that one time?"
"Yeah, that."

But unless you write:
"Remember that girl that one time we went to Toronto to buy that guitar you wanted?"
"The one who wouldn't shut up about her boy-friend? Yeah"

...nobody knows what the hell is going on.
Dialogues for an audience are very different for a reason, as such I think you are doing it right.
Shaman 18th May 2010, 6:31 AM edit delete reply
Shaman
Good point, Effigy. But IMO, that's why naration boxes are important. They give all the details to the audience while leaving the conversation as believable as possible. The only downfall for those is in the writer's skills. They can be a win-win but they could also very much suck and completely take the readers out of it. If done right, they are indeed a powerful tool.